counterpaul wrote:Great work, as usual, Hockey Mask!
Since Parts 9-11 presented events far less chronologically than any other section of TPTR (so far), I think it might be worthwhile to try and list the scenes in chronological order.
Here is my attempt to create a roughly chronological timeline of Days 9-10 (my goal is to place events on the correct days, and also take time of day into account when there are indications--obviously, there is some just plain guessing, but I think this is close):
DAY 9 (Sept 29)
09.01 Evil-Coop walks up to The Farm
09.02 On the plane, Gordon receives call from Colonel to divert to Buckhorn
09.03 Evil-Coop meets Hutch and Chantal
09.04 Gordon informs Diane and pilot going to Buckhorn, Warden Murphy calls Gordon to let him know of Cooper's escape.
09.05 Evil-Coop sends coded text, calls Duncan asking if it's done-better be done next time he calls, Duncan asks Roger to come into his office
09.06 Evil-Coop tells Hutch to kill Warden Murphy, Chantel kisses Evil-Coop goodbye before he drives off, Hutch shoots phone.
09.07 Las Vegas Police Department: The Fuscos interview Bushnell, Bushnell explains Dougie's earlier car accident then tells Dougie they will work together tomorrow, police discuss no info on Dougie before 1997 and cost of taillight, get Dougie's prints off coffee cup, palm prints of Ike came off gun. Dougie-Coop stares at flag, red heels and outlet.
09.08 The Fuscos inspect new taillight
09.09 Ike leaves message that he failed mission, police gather in motel parking lot, Ike arrested in hallway.
09.11 Johnny Horne runs into wall.
09.12 Bobby, Truman and Hawk interview Betty about Garland, Garland had told Betty they would come one day, Betty gives them cylinder hidden in secret compartment of chair
09.13 Buckhorn morgue: Diane smokes and receives Evil-Coop's coded text, Detective Macklay tells Gordon & Co. about Hastings' blog, coroner shows them Dougie's ring.
09.14 Jerry fights with his foot in the woods.
09.15 Lucy eats lunch at her desk, Chad eats lunch in conference room, Truman tells him to go to lunchroom, Truman doesn't know how to open capsule.
09.16 Bobby throws capsule at ground, it emits tone, throws again and it opens, note inside says to go to Jack Rabbits Palace on 10/1 and 10/2.
09.17 Diane smokes, joined by Gordon and Tammy.
09.18 Tammy interviews Hastings, Hastings posted about different dimension, Major was hibernating and asked for coordinates, Hastings I.D.'s picture of Major Briggs, Major floated up and said "Cooper, Cooper" before his head disappeared.
10.04 Candie swats Rodney Mitchum with remote
10.05 Janey-E checks out Dougie-Coop's figure at doctor appointment.
10.06 Candie cries, the Mitchums see television report on Ike arrest and Dougie.
10.07 Janey-E asks Dougie-Coop if he finds her attractive while he eats cake.
10.08 Janey-E and Dougie-Coop have sex, Sonny Jim hears her scream.
10.09 Dr. Amp does show, Nadine watches, automatic drapes open and close at Run Silent, Run Drapes, shovel in store window.
09.19 Ben and Beverly hear humming in Great Northern, Ben refuses Beverley's advances.
11.12 Truman and Hawk discuss map, fire and corn, Log Lady calls Hawk ("There's fire where you are going"). Deputy Jesse asks Truman if he wants to see his new car.
10.15 Roger informs Duncan they caught Ike, Duncan tells Anthony to go to Mitchum brothers and frame Dougie.
10.16 Albert and Constance have Dinner.
10.17 The Mitchums see Anthony on security camera and send Candie to get him, Anthony frames Dougie.
10.18 The Mitchums discuss setting up meeting with Dougie.
10.19 Gordon draws, opens door for Albert but sees Laura, Albert tells Gordon about Diane's texts about Hastings, Tammy shows picture of Evil Coop at glass box in NYC.
09.20 Roadhouse: Chloe meets Ella, Chloe mentions a zebra, Ella has job loss and an armpit rash and a new job.
DAY 10 (Sept 30)
10.10 Janey-E shows appreciation to Dougie-E about "last night".
10.11 Jerry in the woods.
09.10 Andy and Lucy argue about what color chair to buy.
10.01 Richard attacks Miriam, sets her trailer to explode, Richard calls Chad to intercept letter from her to sheriff.
10.02 Carl sings "Red River Dreams," coffee mug tossed through window at Fat Trout.
10.03 Steve attacks Becky.
11.14 Bushnell does push-ups at his desk, Mitchum brothers case was not arson, Mitchums want to meet Dougie at 5:30, $30,000,000 check.
11.15 Mitchums eat breakfast in afternoon, Bradley had dream about Dougie.
10.12 Chad intercepts mail from Lucy.
10.13 Richard receives text from Chad that he got letter.
10.14 Johnny listens to talking bear, Richard attacks and robs Sylvia (grandmother).
11.01 Boys playing ball and find a bloodied Miriam crawling out of woods.
11.02 Becky on phone with no car, screams.
11.03 Shelly gets call from Becky to borrow car.
11.04 Becky gets gun.
11.05 Shelly drives up, Becky takes car, Shelly jumps on hood, falls off.
11.06 Shelly asks Carl for ride to RR, Carl whistles for bus.
11.07 Shelly and Carl ride into town, Shelly calls Norma. Carl radios Maggie to get ahold of Bobby.
11.08 Becky arrives at apartment building, shoots door, Steven and Gersten Hayward hide in stairwell.
11.09 Maggie takes inbound phone calls.
11.10 Gordon, Albert, Tammy, Diane, Det. Macklay and Hastings arrive at abandoned building (2240 Sycamore), see Woodsman behind building, Gordon sees portal and vision of Woodsmen on stairs, find Ruth's body, Woodsman approaches car and splits open Hastings head.
11.16 Dougie-Coop sees One-Armed Man in coffee shop.
11.17 Dougie-Coop carries box, Bushnell gives him check, loads him in limo, driver recognizes him.
11.18 Limo drives down the Strip to "Viva Las Vegas."
11.19 Mitchums wait in desert.
11.20 Limo driving in desert.
11.21 Mitchums discuss Bradley's dream, healed cut on Rodney's face.
11.22 Limo driving in desert.
11.23 Mitchums waiting while Limo pulls up, Dougie-Coop has box, Bradley dreamed about pie in box and can't kill Dougie-Coop, find check.
11.13 Gordon's hand shakes, Albert shows picture of Ruth's arm with coordinates, Diane memorizes coordinates, Tammy and Macklay join them with donuts and coffee, Diane says she saw a Woodsman getting out of the car.
11.24 Mitchums and Dougie-Coop have Dinner and drinks, Dougie-Coop listens to piano, homeless woman thanks Mr. Jackpots, Candie serves Mitchums and Dougie-Coop cherry pie.
11.24 Piano player plays on.
11.11 Bobby, Shelly and Becky talk at RR, Red and Shelly kiss outside, bullet shot thru window, Bobby finds a boy in minivan with gun, horn honks, Deputy arrives from Big Ed's Gas Farm, honking woman screams while girl passenger vomits.
10.20 Sylvia tells Benjamin about Richard attack and threatens to call her lawyer, Ben asks Beverley if she wants to have dinner.
10.21 Log Lady calls Hawk ("Laura is the one").
10.22 Roadhouse: "No Stars"-Rebekah Del Rio.
That's really great. I find myself wondering why they started messing with the chronology in editing at this point in the "film." It seemed to me that one great strength of all of this so far was how everything seemed to be happening more or less in order; it was all easy to make sense of, and because of that it was a great tool to explain to people that they need to relax, Cooper's only been in Dougie's life for four days, not four weeks like it seems! The slow/patient passage of time felt realistic with so much going on, and presented in order made perfect sense. Of course, it all still works as the timeline itself remains the same, but I kind of wish that the scene with Hawk/Truman discussing the map was placed linearly in Part 10. Do you think that scene actually works better in Part 11? What about the uncut movie version of this thing, would you move that scene back up so it takes place in the proper linear order? The scene feels great where it is, I just wish their dialogue didn't contain the line that spells out that they're probably just speaking later the night of the 29th.